Editing YOUR College Essays | The BEST Essay I've Read So Far

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Writing a compelling opening for a college application essay is crucial as it sets the tone and engages the reader. Here are five tips with examples for crafting an impactful start:

Start with an Anecdote or Story: Personal stories can instantly make your essay relatable and engaging.

Example: "As I stood at the podium, my hands trembled with every note of my violin, but the applause afterward taught me the power of perseverance."

Use a Provocative Question or Statement: This piques curiosity and encourages the reader to think deeply.

Example: "What if the solution to world hunger is hidden in a simple backyard garden?"

Describe a Vivid Scene or Moment: This technique paints a picture in the reader's mind, making your essay memorable.

Example: "The sun set over the Himalayas, painting the sky in shades of orange and pink, as I realized my journey had just begun."

Begin with a Bold Declaration: This approach grabs attention and showcases your confidence.

Example: "I am not just another student; I am a relentless innovator ready to change the world."

Quote Someone Inspirational or Influential: Starting with a quote can provide a thematic foundation for your essay.

Example: As Nelson Mandela once said, "Education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world," a belief that has guided my academic journey.

Remember, the key is to be authentic and reflective of your unique experiences and perspectives. Your opening should provide a glimpse into who you are and what you value.
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What question does these 2 essays apply to? Is it just the general/personal essay?

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Quick question, after watching pretty much every video on your channel I've noticed how you place heavy emphasis on the P/S ratio. However, the second essay you've displayed here, the one you gave an 8 to, doesn't really display much of either a problem or solution. Does this mean that it is possible to draft good essays that don't need to stick to the double problem solution format? Asking because mine is similar to the essay in question here, and I'm a little anxious 😅😅

I’m applying to Northeastern as my ED school. Since they don’t have any supplementals this would help a lot!

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Hi friends!! For the next month (until 11/1/23), we’ll be selecting 3 of the commenters on THIS video for a FREE essay review! To qualify, all you have to do is like and reply to this comment with something you learned from this video :) FYI normally, we charge $225 for a professional common app review with feedback from two of our ElevatEd consultants!

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Can anyone please tell me whether fictional essay is allowed in common app or not? Different people are saying different things. 😊

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This is so so helpful! After watching this, I cut own a few sentences that I didn’t need and elaborated on certain things! Much appreciated!!

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Please can I submit my essay for review but not have it included in the video

Anyone can help me please. Can I use rhetoric questions in my common app essay?

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Is it possible to submit my essay for advice but not have it included in a video?

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I also have a family based essay

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If I deleted the cliche hook, would I keep my opening two sentences or add more?

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